As I said on my last post, here is my new updated video and the old video before I changed the contrast of my clips and made the few adjustments my teacher recommended:
Old
10th march rough cut from Amy Washbourne on Vimeo.
New
contrast rough cut from Amy Washbourne on Vimeo.
It's marginally better, Amy, although it's still only bottom L3. The main problems are:
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- Editing: it's not tight enough. Watching it back, a lot of the editing would be a lot more effective if you hit the beat; this would allow me to credit you more for being tighter with regard to that skill
- Miming: either you've not synched to the track well enough or your performers aren't miming effectively to the track. Either way, the performance element contains aspects which lack a clear sense of focus
- Variety: linked to my first point, it's very "samey" - there's no sense that this really builds to much of a climax
Ultimately, the question you've got to be honest about is: would your audience want to watch it more than once?
There's not much you can really do about the footage itself, and I think you'll need to accept that. I can credit the range of shot distances and the composition of some of the shots. You can certainly make the editing a lot tighter, since you should try as much as possible to cut on the beat - I'll be able to credit this as well. I still think you should add an effect to the performance footage to differentiate it from the narrative footage.